Interim feedback part 2

After re-filming a few scenes and putting them together in place, I asked my teacher if my product fitted the requirement and made better sense.

Here is the feedback:

Point 1 - 'It is unclear that the first scene is a dream sequence. If it was in a different colour to signify the past or signify it was a dream, this would make it more clear for audiences.'

Point 2 - 'It's also unclear that the little girl at the beginning is the older girl as they don't look similar. In the beginning scene, if the little girl looks into the camera this might make it clearer.'

Point 3- 'The girl walking down the alley doesn't really add much or do much for the story. Improve on it.'

For point 3, I need to try and edit the 3 short clips of the girl being followed down the alley so that they create tension as mid points between the long montage scene. I like the idea of the girl  being followed closely, because it is a convention of psychological thrillers, but I need to find a way to incorporate it into the trailer better.

I asked my teacher if the short time of 50 seconds is enough for a teaser trailer for the coursework, she said that an aim of 1minute - 1 minute 30 seconds is more of a reasonable teaser trailer time.

My own feedback of my trailer so far is that I am not happy with it. To improve this, I need to re-edit specific dissolves and transitions, as they do not fit in with the trailer.

Other improvements I thought would be suitable would be to change the colour of footage which is meant to be from the past to colours such as black and white or sepia as it would be clear for the audience to understand that these scenes are to do with the girl's past.

My trailer is still unfinished though, as I need to look at my research into fonts and text for my subtitles as well as create a title for my project overall.

I also need to look at production companies to create my own, as well as finish the soundtrack for the end of the trailer.

Filming schedule for new scenes

New intro scene of young protagonist painting and singing


Friday 19th October
1600 Set up camera on tripod, facing down onto floor
1605 Film newspaper falling from up above and landing on the floor. Making sure that the camera can clearly see the headline and image.


Saturday 20th October
1000 Arrive at cousin's house to film.
1015 Set up room with barely any furniture and props on floor
1030 Practise run through of filming with young actress as she sings and paints picture of mask
1045 Film scene a few times with different angles
1100 Filming little girl screaming into the camera
1115 Finish filming with little girl

Afternoon
1400 Film protagonist switching on lights
1415 Film POV of protagonist seeing masked person in corner and switching light on again to reveal them gone


During this piece of filming, I will be filming close-ups of the little girl singing and then looking into the camera. I will also film a long shot of her painting and then pan round to reveal the image that she is painting.

Extra scenes to film and new story

Interim feedback: Teacher

After collating all of my research, I showed my media teacher what I have created so far to see if I'm on track and if my product is fitting into the right genre.

So far, my shots don't quite make sense because my teacher thought that the man in the mask was stalking the young girl.

Another big improvement that I noticed was that a lot of my shots are far too long for a trailer. I need to cut these down.

Ideas for improvement:

Historial background to the story.

I will be filming a few extra scenes of a little girl painting a picture of the masked villian. This is so the little girl at the beginning can be linked as the future young lady all grown up.

Newspaper shot
Using a newspaper will alert audiences as to what the story is about. This will show that the little girl was involved in a murder case for which she was found not guilty, the masked man was. This will hint as to why the woman can see the masked man everywhere.

Parrells to little girl and older girl
In a shot where the older girl is seen screaming, I could use another shot of the little girl screaming too but only use audio from the older girl screaming. This can show the importance of the little girl with the current story.

More montage shots
Light turn on and off and when on show little girl or masked villian in the corner. (or bother)

Newspaper shot to be used in montage